“The Empty Warrior: Volume One of the Aberrant Chronicles” by J. D. McCartney

08/26/12

I realized this has been stated by numerous reviewers already, but can’t the author just write stuff in plain English? I really liked what I was reading only to find some idiotic word stuck in the middle of a great paragraph! I highlighted over 19 such words and I’m sure there were more because I just started skipping words I didn’t understand. Even writing science-fiction that might deal with strange settings, aliens, spacecraft and such, I know it can be written with words that continue the story, not stop it dead!

I would volunteer to edit the next book if I could replace all the unnecessary words. I didn’t say delete, just replace. Write all the words you want because you write a good story but any story that requires me to use my dictionary more than twice is just not going to work.

You want paid for your work, then write like those of us that work for a living talk; simple as that!

And the story-line with the dogs, wow, that was just brilliant. Keep that up.

One thought on ““The Empty Warrior: Volume One of the Aberrant Chronicles” by J. D. McCartney”

  1. I also realize the importance of a dictionary but unlike other reviewers I like the occasional word I have to look up. I’m sixty and still love to learn a little.

    The Empty Warrior is great, a little slow at the start but it quickly gets going into directions I didn’t see coming. The entire book makes the human race seem much like Americans in the early 1900’s, driven and fearless.

    I hope McCartney will write another book to go with the first, did I mention it was awesome? As for getting paid, keep writing books of this quality and pay days will take care of themselves.

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